The Green Bay Packers are the 2011 super bowl champions. The majority of people that I have talked to were in favor of the packers. At the beginning of the game I thought that it was going to be a blow out, however in the end Pittsburgh came back to within 6 points of tying the game. The Steelers had way to many turnovers to win the game and Ben Roethlisberger’s performance in the first half was poor although he did rally in the second half to bring the Steelers close. Many people just do not like Roethlisberger and would rather see him lose than win. In my opinion I believe that Ben Roethlisberger did not deserve to win a super bowl anyway, He is just a shady character between crashing his motorcycle without a helmet or sexually assaulting a 20 year old girl at a hotel in Georgia. He ignored his coaches wishes to wear a helmet when he rode. This was also the second time he was accused of sexual assault, he was accused a few years earlier in Nevada. His behavior is questionable and should not be considered a role model of children across America like many quarterbacks become after winning the super bowl. I know I wouldn’t want my children to tell me they want to be just like Ben. Stars in the NFL should be held to a higher standard and should not be involved in allegations such as the ones against stars such as Michael Vick or Brett Favre. The Steelers have won the most super bowls in the NFL including one recently. However Green Bay has overcome many obstacles to make it to this year’s super bowl. Their transformation from Favre to Rodgers clearly affected the team’s performance as well as the number of injuries that the Packers roster had.
Sean,
ReplyDeleteI like how you focused most of your piece on the misbehavior of so many players in the NFL. Did this affect how you felt about the game itself?
I want you to work on focus. Even the smallest element should be able to be turned into 400 words. Your reflection on these players, their roles in the NFL and in in the televisions of family televisions is a good choice, but you did choose to move away from that focus a few times. By focusing on an established thesis, you will be able to provide more vivid description and connect your case to other players, other sports, and possible solutions.
Also, use paragraphs. It will do your readers a favor. Make sure and do a little research on paragraphs so you know their form and function.
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I think your blog was really interesting and easy to read which is important. The background facts on the athletes made it different than the other post. Maybe more description of what was happening rather than just saying it. The connection to children who pick athletes as their role models was good.
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